Tuesday, August 28, 2012

Writing With Skill - Week 5 Day 4 - rough draft

The kids had to write another 150-300 word paper, this time about the small pox vaccine.  This is our rough draft.  We will edit later this week.

11yo

First, small pox was a great danger.  In the 18th century, smallpox killed 40,000,000 people per year.  People with smallpox were kept in special houses.  Half of the people who had smallpox died.  Many doctors gave people mild cases of smallpox.  Half of the time, people died.  Then, Edward Jenner was born in 1749.  He was innoculated when he was a child.  He got sick and had to stay in a smallpox house.  Later, in 1762, Jenner began to train as a doctor.  He was an apprentice to a surgeon for eight years.  He entered St. George's hospital in 1770.  He studied surgery and anatomy there.  He then noticed that milkmaids that had cowpox didn't get smallpox.  He put pus from cowpox blisters on an 8 year old boy and a few others.  He had found a vaccine for smallpox.  They began to give vaccines in 1808.  Deaths decreased to 600 per year.

9yo

Smallpox
Everyone was getting smallpox.  A ton of people kept getting killed by it.  It had killed 40 million people in the eighteenth century.  Half the people who got it died.  Everyone who got it was sent to a place called a smallpox house.  There was no reliable way to avoid smallpox.  Many doctors gave a person mild cases of smallpox to keep them safe.  Most of the time, the mild cases of smallpox would kill a patient.  Then a person who changed the future was born.  His name was Edward Jenner.  He was born in the year 1749.  Got a shot against smallpox when he was a little kid.  Soon the shot made him very sick.  Then he was kept in a smallpox house.  Then he trained as a doctor.  He found out cowpox cured the smallpox. 

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